Cinquain Sorrows over!

After months of writer’s block I have done it!

4th of july, fireworks, independance day celebration

I have wrote a real cinquain. What do you think? (be gentle)

Monthly Checkup

Warm tears,

the baby squirming in my arms,

he knows what is coming-

how could he not-

shot time.

 

 
This is the old one:
 
Love
Warm tears
Holding my son
Hearing him cry hurts
Immunizations
 
 

Don’t know what I’m talking about? Look at this post.

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