Friday Fictioneers, My 1st Real-time Attempt

Here is my first real-time attempt at joining Friday Fictioneers. I have been reading the short stories of others for over 2 years and finally got the courage to join in. Friday Fictioneers is a group of bloggers that write 100-word stories after being inspired by a photo posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We are allowed to use the photo in our post, and encouraged to leave each other comments. I will not be joining Concrit but I will be reading other bloggers’ stories and trying to leave comments. I always appreciate anyone who takes the time to leave a comment on any of my posts.

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photo credit: Luther Siler

Flop

She was a goner now. She had broken the most expensive thing in the building: that big stupid bird.

She had hated that thing from the moment he sat it in the lobby. She tried to tell him they were not a theme park, but he hadn’t listened. He thought that children would like it.

She complained to her co-workers about it. They’d never believe she had knocked it over on accident.

Tasha wondered for a moment if she could hide it until she could call a repair man.

Then she heard a wail, “Mommy! What happened to the birdie?”

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11 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers, My 1st Real-time Attempt

  1. Good job! (I’d have knocked the silly thing over, too. 🙂 ) But no hiding her flop when little children are around!
    A couple of comments:
    Nowadays writers use contractions to reduce word counts. (Read this advice from a pro editor.) Once they weren’t acceptable, but now contractions are considered standard fare.

    Eliminate that in He thought that children would like it.

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