FF Story | Escaping the King

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Friday Fictioneers is a group of bloggers that write 100-word stories after being inspired by a photo posted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. We are allowed to use the photo in our post and encouraged to leave each other comments. I always appreciate anyone who takes the time to leave a comment on any of my posts. I write my story before I read any of the other writers’ creations. Please share your favorite story on your favorite social media sites!

If you are unsure of the rules/form of Friday Fictioneers then please go to Rochelle’s blog by clicking on her name above. I know it’s not Friday but many FF writers write and share their story on Wednesday and Thursday. I will share a quote with you tomorrow.

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PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

  Escaping the King

“Hurry!”

“I’m trying!”

“Time’s running out.” Jaida said.

She was watching the flipping hourglass. If the King would just leave it still this wouldn’t be so nerve wrecking. But he insisted on flipping it back and forth, changing how much time they had.

Maik was putting the pieces together as fast as he could, trying to build a door.

“The square ones must go on the edge!” whispered Jaida.

She knew he was watching. He was obsessed with her and was hoping she would fail. Had she been left to herself she might have failed, but she was not alone.

24 thoughts on “FF Story | Escaping the King”

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    • Rochelle, can I ask if I have done something wrong??

      I had to add this story twice to the linkup the Thursday it up. And I just now had to re-add this week’s story. I added it on Saturday and I know that I did because I then took the opportunity to tweet a link to the collection of FF writers. After you add it asks you to do that and I always do. I just now had to add Storms in the City again because it wasn’t there.

      Was I removed?

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      • Dear Symanntha,

        The only thing that was wrong, and I’m not sure why, was that when I clicked on your link for this week’s prompt, it was an error page–no story. So I removed it and sent you an email to let you know. I see that you’ve successfully linked now and will go read your story.

        In answer to your question, you’ve most certainly done nothing wrong.

        Shalom,

        Rochelle

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        • Okay! I’m relieved!
          I was in a hurry when I linked it, maybe I did it wrong. I haven’t checked the email that you would have emailed me at. Thanks for being on top of things. I will take my time next week and hopefully there will be no issues!
          Thank you!

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  8. The pace is very tense indeed. I enjoyed too how although little information and description is given in relation to the characters and location, the reader is still able to conjure up the situation.

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  10. Agree with the other commenters. I like that she is whispering to him, also. It adds a conspiratorial sense to it all.

    Just one note: I think the term you are thinking of in paragraph four is “nerve-racking.”

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